Writing Center Meeting

I had my Writing Center meeting yesterday at 10:00 am with William.  I got there a little early, so we began our appointment before the scheduled time.  This was beneficial because we ended up talking about my paper for more than 30 minutes.  I first explained to him what my paper was about and a little background information.  He then asked me if I had anything specific I needed help with and I really didn't have that many questions, but I did ask him about the structure of my paper and if my thoughts and ideas flowed well together.  So we began by going through each of my paragraphs.  We first read through the Introduction, and he felt like my thesis was very vague and a little too general.  But, he thought that the topic of my paper was good and that I had access to a lot of information but that I would just have to find it.  From there, we went through each paragraph and I gave an overview of the main topic and idea.  Overall, he felt like my ideas were cohesive and that they flowed well together in the order that they were in.  He did not feel that way about some of my sentences concerning the paragraph about addressing counter arguments.  I had some choppy sentences that needed to be rewritten.  William was saying that he was concerned about what I was going to add to my paper, but that if I compared two commercials or advertisements from the same company and prove how children are becoming more and more susceptible to being targets for unhealthy food advertisements.  Overall, I believe that my writing center meeting was beneficial to my paper because William gave me helpful tips as to how I can make my paper better and more cohesive.